I wrote this to a girl I know cuz she needed something to relax her tell me if its any good?
girl moan pleasure
I swear this came off the top of my head with no revisions or anything, tell me what u think:
ur at the beach
the sun feels so good on ur body
u could fall asleep forever
with the warmth of the sun protecting u
a tall well built guy walks ur way
dark brown hair and baby blue eyes
hes obviously spent some time at the gym
he smiles at u
he asks if he can put some more lotion on ur back so u dont get burned from the sun
u say…
of course
so he takes ur lotion
squirts some on his hand
and rubs ur shoulders
u moan with pleasure
it feels sooooooooo good
he stands over you
u can hear the waves crashing and it sounds so natural and peaceful
a few seagulls gawk in the distance
and the guy continues to rub ur back and makes his way down ur spine
so sensual
so tender
he asks if u like it and u utter out a yes, completely absorbed in pleasure
after hes done he starts stroking ur hair
kissing ur shoulders
u are drifting off
(cont)
(cont)
the sun is starting to set
a cool breeze brushes over u
the weather is perfect
its just u and him
he continues to watch over u and kisses ur whole body
by now ur in a dream
a dream of pure extasy
a glimpse of the heaven doors
he picks u up ever so gently
he carries u home
u feel so relaxed
like god is carrying u and nothing can harm u
u feel weightless
he gets u home, a small apartment just past the boardwalk overlooking the beach
its nice and cozy
he tucks u into ur bed
the blankets feel cool and refreshing
he comes into bed with u
ur still in ur dream world as he wraps his arms around u and kisses u goodnight
its peaceful
u could never imagine a greater feeling than this
a feeling of pure bliss, joy, pleasure
true happiness
and it stays with u forever
the end
lol she lives in another state but ok
It’s too sexual. That’ll relax a girl, but not in the right way.
And it’s too tough to read. Make it sway together. Add a few rhymes. Make it easy to roll of the tongue. Chicks love that romantic crap!
Heh. Yeah. Good luck!
It it wonderful, but I just don’t like it.. Sorry!
Take care
sounds really good…you should expand it a little and write erotic/romantic stories for females, but it makes me a little sad because it never happens that way in real life
Man she might like it, but it sounds like you really want to get in her pants. She probably gonna know you got a hard on! If she likes you then go for it. Didnt sound bad at all though. Good luck!